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Warm tender heat
Broken Eggshells, Birth of Life
A new Beginning.
Warm tender heat
Empty Eggshells, Death of Life
A man's appetite .
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Struggling Hard
Breaking shells of barriers
Exploring new world.
This Haiku is written for 'Haiku Heights : April A2Z Heights - Day 05' for the prompt 'Eggshells' .
P.S. : So, after I wrote this I went out for a reading spree to find out what others might have written. And I am truly amazed at their intuition and felt I missed something here. Don't actually know what, may be the intention of the word, the true meaning behind the word.
Since I don't know what exactly the word meant...and the intention...this was AMAZING for me!
ReplyDeleteVeryyy nice! :D
Haha... Guess we both are on the same boat. :P
DeleteI am glad you like it. Thanks. :)
"Empty Eggshells, Death of Life
ReplyDeleteA man's appetite"--- That's a funny take on one side, but a deep and poignant one if you think seriously! Well penned!!
Yeah. I tried to make a sort of funny and some serious note as well.
DeleteI thought I failed in that.
Thank You. :)
Maybe you missed out something but still you have come up with something else that's really good. Loved the way how the start and end of life is portrayed in the verses :)
ReplyDeleteUntil later,
Keirthana :)
Thanks for the kind words, K.
DeleteI am glad you like what I wrote. :)
Harsh truth!
ReplyDeleteYeah. Exactly. :)
DeleteMost of the Haiku Heights participants used the idiom "walking on eggshells" in their poems.
ReplyDeleteIt's an old idiom and it means someone is trying very hard not to upset another person.
Perhaps this idiom that so many poets thought of for this prompt is what is giving you that feeling that you're missing something.
Trust me, you're not missing anything at all. You write from a different perspective and that's the core of haiku and, in fact, all poetry.
Well done.
Oh, Thank You so much.
DeleteI came to know about that after a long thought but was still hanging with no clear ground.
And Thank you. I'm glad you liked it.
Take Care and Keep Writing. :)
Being a vegetarian, I can totally feel the deep meaning of this lines. Nothing could have explained it better than this. Kudos!!
ReplyDeleteAnyway, I came across this Haiku thing in many of blogger's post. I am really new to the blogging world. If you can, would you explain me Haiku in nutshell?
Thank You so much, Dhara. :D
DeleteYeah Sure.
Haiku is a shortest form of poetry. Basically originated in Japanese. Haiku generally consists of 17 syllables, divided in three lines in 5-7-5 format. But the advanced new Haiku can contain any number of lines.
The main intention of Haiku is to portray a deep meaning in a very few words. Though we might feel that what we can explain in a mere 17 syllables of words. But that's the beauty of Haiku. If you look at my Haiku, I don't usually follow the pattern. But I try to convey the message whatsoever.
This is the suggestion given to me by a blogger when I started writing Haikus:
First, don't worry about 5-7-5. There is more to haiku than forcing 17 syllables into 3 lines of 5-7-5. Sometimes a poem is better with less. Sometimes poems just naturally sound best in 5-7-5. It depends on the poem.
Focus less on metaphor, simile, heavy emotion, romantic or flowerly language, and personification in haiku.
Haiku is all about real moments that the poet can see in real everyday life. A good haiku suggests or lets the reader "finish the poem" with his or her own thoughts. A haijin (haiku poet) doesn't beat the reader over the head with his ideas.
Haiku is about subtlety. Haiku shows rather than tells. Trees don't literally dance, but they do sway or shake in the wind--depending on the wind strength.
Haiku is also all about juxtaposition or comparing two unalike things, like the trees and a dance in this case. This is a strong haiku idea that needs a little tweaking.
If you want to compare dancing and winter trees try subtlety to suggest a winter dance rather than come outright and say it. It's tricky and that's why haiku isn't as easy as it looks, but it's a lot of fun.
a delicate dance
the trees gently sway
in the winter wind
gently swaying
to the winter wind's song
the trees
A dance metaphor is still in #1. The song metaphor is in #2. They're both more subtle and only have one metaphor instead of two. Less is more in haiku.
Though you asked me to explain in a Nutshell, but I thought if I was through you would be able to write good poetry.
Wow! That is intense. I mean in a good way. I notice you all write about one same word or the same object everyday. Where do you pick that word up?
DeleteSorry to be so interrogative but, I tried searching a few times on this and was not satisfied.
I like your poems, they say a lot more than just those 3 lines. And thank you for explaining me so thoroughly.
Haha, Thank You.
DeleteThere is plenty of inspiration everywhere.You might see something on your way home and express that in the form of a poem or in the words of a haiku.
And about the words. There are different platforms which initiate this phenomenon. Like there is this Haiku Heights , Carpe Diam .Well there are the links that I know of.
Ah! Its' okay. A questioning mind is a healthy mind. :D .
And you are being too generous. Thank You. :)
My Pleasure.
Hope to see your poems as well. :)
Thank you again.
DeleteI will try to write them but, my laziness always wins over my aspirations!